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Veridian Gold  

This gold cannot be sold for profit; nor can it be made to encase jems. This gold

only beats at you until you are bloody and ragged; a mere skeleton of what you once were.

The only thing it has in common with the true gold is its ability to turn men, into

monsters.
Sand slipped stealthily through the young woman's clenched fist. There are many

who have adapted to this harsh climate, only the strong survive. Clenching her eyes shut,

an image appears, one not made from the heat of the sun as it crushed down upon each

living creatures' neck, but of a memory. She remembers the faces of her younger siblings,

a small boy and a girl only a few years younger than herself. Her heart felt slowly

punctured with the thoughts, and a fountain of tears rose to her ears and nose,

threatening to spill.
Jerking back to the present she shook off her emotions and knelt down, sensing a

calculated stare resting on her.  Turning slowly, she scanned the barren sandy plains.

Lips quirking, the young woman thought back on how her parents had told her and her

siblings a child's story of a place where plants grew so numerous that all you saw was

green.
Her younger sibling had taken the fantasy to heart and had led their little

brother out to find the hidden land of green, the two were never found. The Root tracer

clans were the best trackers, they were always able to find nearly anything what was lost

in the sand storms, but the children had disappeared. Now after everyone had given up,

only their older sister kept searching. Who knows, perhaps little Nai and baby Judd had

found this mystical world and were playing in the shade of million plants, where there

was no sun and plenty of water.
Suddenly, an explosion of sand burst through a wall of yellow, with the sound of

a beastly roar. Hurling itself on the girl, the creature attacked from the side. Two

massive paws stomped into the ground on either side of her head. The massive beast's body

rippled as he let out another forceful roar. Reaching a deft hand behind the triceratops

first tusk, the girl gave him a quick scratch. Instantly, the dinosaur fell to the earth

in raptures under his masters attentions as she moved to the beast's belly that special

spot behind its crest.
Getting to her feet the woman swept off the sand in a useless gesture, in this

land sand was everywhere; even the air they breathed swam with the grainy nuisance. When

you were this deep into the sand dunes you needed protective clothes that would keep your

skin from eroding, and goggles to protect your eyes during the storms.  "Come on O'toul,"

the sand stepper encouraged lightly, "its time to make camp," if nothing else, O'toul had

learned the patterns of command in her voice and he obediently rolled to his feet and

followed her.
Quickly, she had set up the tent and pulled out some meat that had been stored in

the compartments of O'toul's side bags, and began to roast it over the heat of fire. The

girl did not like fire, it reminded her too much of the sun. She hoped soon she would

find Nai and Judd so that she could once more stay inside the cool tents and take care of

the plants where it was safe and calm. She fell asleep to the sounds of the desert, a far

off animal calling for its family, the thumping wings of large flying creatures as they

returned to their cliff edges in the west, and mostly silence.
this is my first go at the story. We are still trying to understand and shape the world as well as the inhabitants of it. every day brings new ideas and you will see soon just how dangerous and lovely this land is.

Story by AlizaFoxx
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
The opening is exceptionally good. And you keep the flow running throughout.

The problem lies with the reader when they turn distracted. That's sad :( They're honestly missing out on something really well written.
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AlizaFoxx Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
so, do you think i should adapt it and make it more exciting? I could do that.
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
... I think you should... it would give it more credence... and much more depth...
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AlizaFoxx Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Your welcome :)
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